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having a poem writing contest and whoevers is the best will get it published in our yearbook so i wrote this poem:

i have a sad story
a story of my past year
it might get a little gory
or yo will just shed a tear

my family went through some hard times
and my brother had to move to missouri
all we had left were dimes
then our life went into a scurry

my dad was bad and went to jail
and my grandma had a stroke
we asked ourselves why he failed
and then my grandma spoke

maybe this year wasnt the best
but i an looking forward to the rest
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ok so i need your opinon on how good it is. rate it 1-10 and if somthings wrong please help me on fixing it. you may sujest diffrent words or things i can put in there but please help me out the best that you can!




rules:
must be 14 lines
must show some thought and effort
and it must show the rhyme scheme abab cdcd efef gg(if you have no clue what this is dont worry about it